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1. Beat Officer Chris Engle, who was the one to write Felt’s citation, agrees that the issue of minors drinking will remain an issue in Pullman and that beat officers are important in helping control underage drinking.

Beat Officer Chris Engle, who wrote Felt's citation, agrees that underage drinking will remain an issue in Pullman and beat officers are important in helping control it.
2. According to the data, WSU reported no homicides, 2 aggravated assaults, and several other incidence.
WSU reported no homicides, two aggrivated assaults and several other incidents, according to the data.
3. “If it was not for financial aid,” Smith said, “than I would have had a much harder time getting my Bachelor’s degree; not to mention my Master’s.”
"If it was not for financial aid, "Smith said, "then I would have had a much harder time getting my Bachelors degree, not to mention my Master's.
4. Though the university is losing money, they are also receiving applications from more potential students, Jones said.
Although the university is losing money, it is also receiving applications for more potential students, Jones said.
5. The Whitman County housing market experienced a 31 percent decrease in home sales in the past year. (Shorten by five words)
Whitman County home sales decresed by 31 percent in the past year.
6. As a 22 year old student at Seattle University Stephanie Marie did not know the different risk associated with having unprotected sex. (Correct and shorten by three words.)
As a 22 year-old Seattle University student, Stephanie Marie did not know the risks of unprotected sex.
7. The Washington State Liquor Control Board has had enough of the caffeinated malt-liquor beverage, Four Loko. It is now in the process of banning it from shelves on Nov. 18. (Combine into one sentence and cut any unnecessary words.)
The Washington State Liquor Control Board will ban the caffeinated malt-liquor beverage Four Loko beginning Nov. 18.
8. Despite criticism for its lack of change so far, legislators uphold their belief that the ban on cell phones while driving will eventually lower the accident rates.
Despite criticism, legislators uphold their beliefs that the ban on using cell phones while driving will eventually lower accident rates.
9. Police said they do not know (who/whom) attended the party last month.
Police say they do not know who attended the party last month.